1) The
pitch. Same as last time.
2) A
reflection on the feedback you received from your last pitch.
Many people
told me that it would be better if I wore business attire and I decided to
change into business attire for this video. My last pitch was lengthy so I kept
it short and simple this time, as requested. I was also told to make less pauses and have the pitch flow better.
3) What did
you change, based on the feedback?
I wore
business attire this time. I kept my pitch short and simple this time. I did not pause for long periods of time.
Hey Cindy,
ReplyDeleteYou spoke very well but you could work on the flow of your words a little better. If you worked on the flow then your video would be much longer as well and be closer to the 1 minute mark you needed to reach. Besides this, your business idea is smart and would definitely be a buy for greek houses trying to eat healthier food. As a member of a fraternity I would definitely want to get your meal plan for the healthier food.
Check out mine here: http://andrewdales.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hello Cindy,
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed watching your elevator pitch. I like how you took the comments from your first pitch and implemented them into your second pitch. I thought that you spoke with confidence and clarity. I also enjoyed your passion for the company. I think this is a great idea and would definitely bring it up to my fraternity for consideration.
Please check out my post at: http://prosper95.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html
Hey Cindy,
ReplyDeleteI am actually in a fraternity on campus and I understand exactly what you are talking about. On almost every day of the week, I eat the same low quality foods and I think that your idea could be very successful. Good pitch and good idea! Check out my blog at http://thekigelreport.blogspot.com/2016/02/elevator-pitch-no-2.html